I have written a paper on The Impact of AI on the Future of Work: Challenges,
Opportunities, and Policy Considerations. I received feedback from my instructor that my essay does not have a clear straight forward focus and that it is more descriptive than argumentative. I have uploaded a screenshot of the feedback.
I would want my essay to be rewritten and focus more on the threats on surveillance and data by AI, since my introduction starts shedding light on those. You are welcome to change the title if needed. The thesis statement needs to be changed according to the argument being presented.
Some important requirements to take notice:
- The essay must have an outline showing its structure (already mentioned in the draft).
- I have uploaded 4 pdf which are sources studied in class. IT IS ABOSULUTELY MENDATORY to include at least 2 of these sources as reference in the essay. It is already implemented in the essay. You can choose to use the same information extracted from these sources or new information from these sources according to the claim you are supporting with them.
- The essay requires us to use atleast 2 images, preferably graphs, to support the claims I am making in my essay. The image that shows data breaches is relavant to the topic about surveillance, but the other one is not. So that has to be changed. Use the image as a reference and talk about it in the essay.
The four C’s of citation are Context, Connection, Conveyance and Citation.
It is basically a way to implement more context on the borrowed materials in the essay.
I have uploaded 2 pdf on the 4C’s of Citation which explains more about it. One of the pdf’s include example of how it is implemented in essay.
There must be in text citations mentioning the page number of the source from which the information was collected. Please also provide me (in the reference section) the paragraph number the information was taken from so I can match them.