I need to edit and revise my paper. I’ve attached a sample paper that received high marks (Mediatisation Essay)
This is the feedback from my tutor:
- Does feel a bit descriptive. Needs a few more specific examples to help illustrate your points. Intro says you’re focusing on Africa so give examples from there.
- Needs a bit more regarding media industries (remember the name of the module!). As per point above, link the discussion of theories to specific media industry examples
- Need to make clearer the similarities/differences between the two theories.
- Can take a specific example (Nollywood?) and appraise it through the lense of both theories to highlight how they view the growth/shape of that industry differently.