this was my feedback from class this should help with essay revision
OVERALL COMMENTS
See your
assessment for additional feedback.
Marlyne, I know you are pleased
to have this assessment completed. I appreciate your effort and your
information is insightful in many areas. However, this assessment required an
analysis of the contributing factors of a population health issue and the selection,
development, and leadership of the coalition on a local level or community in
which you are familiar. Please review the feedback in each section of the
Scoring Guide noting opportunities for better alignment between the content and
assessment criteria. It is helpful to use the Scoring Guide to ensure
consistency between your content and the assessment requirements. I also
recommend reviewing the headings in the example paper which align with the
Scoring Guide to better organize your thoughts and present clear and concise
information for the reader. If you have any questions, please do not hesitate
to reach out. Please do not be discouraged as this is very common with a first
paper in a program. You Can Do This!
Dr. Zajic
RUBRICS
CRITERIA
1
Analyse the impact of factors
that contribute to a chronic population health concern.
COMPETENCY
Apply interprofessional
collaboration, communication, and leadership best practices to advance
population health.
NON_PERFORMANCE
Does not describe the factors that contribute to a
chronic population health concern.
BASIC: Describes
the factors that contribute to a chronic population health concern.
PROFICIENT: Analyzes the impact of factors that contribute to a
chronic population health concern.
DISTINGUISHED: Provides a concise, accurate analysis of the impact
of factors that contribute to a chronic population health concern. Exhibits
clear insight into the affected groups and the social determinants of health,
and draws well-reasoned conclusions.
COMMENTS:
You selected the population
health issue related to health disparities, describing several factors that
contribute to the chronic population health concern. This was good work. An
important step for this assessment is to analyze factors, especially the social
determinants of health and their impact on the population health issue in
a local community that you are familiar with, one where you are currently or
previously located. You have some great information but in order to
meet the proficient level competency the application piece needs to be
addressed.
CRITERIA
2
Form a collaborative,
interprofessional coalition to address a chronic population health concern.
COMPETENCY
Apply interprofessional
collaboration, communication, and leadership best practices to advance
population health.
NON_PERFORMANCE: Does
not form a coalition to address a chronic population health concern.
BASIC: Forms a coalition that lacks key members or whose
makeup is ill-equipped to address a chronic population health concern.
PROFICIENT: Forms a collaborative, interprofessional coalition
to address a chronic population health concern.
DISTINGUISHED: Forms a collaborative, interprofessional coalition
to address a chronic population health concern. Member selection is perceptive
and clearly focused on the overall goal. Articulates clear strategies for
optimizing collaboration and communication that are well-supported by the
literature.
COMMENTS:
Good work in thinking about your
selected case scenario related to the population health issue of health disparities.
You identified strategies that might be utilized to optimize collaboration and
communication, with several good points and the use of supporting literature to
strengthen your thoughts. However, in order to move to the proficient level of
competency, you need to create a coalition to address the selected population
health issue in your local area. Who would you select as members for the
coalition to address this identified issue in your local area? See the
assessment overview and example paper to review depicting the coalition members
and their roles in a table format.
CRITERIA
3
Explain potential ethical issues
that might be relevant for a health care coalition to consider in addressing
its mission.
COMPETENCY
Apply professional ethics and
the principles of diversity and inclusion to advance population health.
NON_PERFORMANCE: Does not identify potential ethical issues that
might be relevant for a health care coalition to consider in addressing its
mission.
BASIC: Identifies
potential ethical issues that might be relevant for a health care coalition to
consider in addressing its mission.
PROFICIENT: Explains potential ethical issues that might be
relevant for a health care coalition to consider in addressing its mission.
DISTINGUISHED: Explains potential, wide-ranging ethical issues
that might be relevant for a health care coalition to consider in addressing
its mission. Exhibits keen insight into the application of ethical principles
in particular situations on a micro or meso level, drawing from applicable
disciplinary codes of conduct.
COMMENTS:
Good work in identifying
potential ethical issues that might be relevant when thinking about health
disparities. Can you take this one step further in terms of explaining how
these ethical issues might be relevant to your chosen coalition? What is the
connection between ethical issues, practice, and leadership? Consider
incorporating your professional ethical code as well as discussing how general
ethical principles might play a role for the coalition on both a micro and meso
level. Organizing under the heading of “Ethical Considerations”
would help to more clearly and concisely present your information. Addressing
these areas would be consistent with the Proficient level in the Scoring Guide.
CRITERIA
4
Explain the principles of
diversity and inclusion applicable to the formation of a health care coalition
and its interactions with the community.COMPETENCY
Apply professional ethics and
the principles of diversity and inclusion to advance population health.
NON_PERFORMANCE: Does not explain the general applicability of
diversity and inclusion principles in addressing population health.
BASIC: Explains
the general applicability of diversity and inclusion principles in addressing
population health.
PROFICIENT: Explains the principles of diversity and inclusion
applicable to the formation of a health care coalition and its interactions
with the community.
DISTINGUISHED: Explains the principles of diversity and inclusion
applicable to the formation of a health care coalition and its interactions
with the community. Provides clearly articulated strategies and best practices,
supported by credible evidence, that apply principles of diversity and
inclusion to achieve coalition goals.
COMMENTS:
Good work in thinking about
diversity and inclusion as you address the population health issue related to
health disparities. You have some great information. How would your
specific coalition address this? How do you understand diversity and inclusion
in this context? How might the principles of diversity and inclusion be applied
to the team and their work in the community? This type of information would be
consistent with a Proficient level in the Scoring Guide.
CRITERIA
5
Explain how literature and
research in the field can be used to develop best practices for addressing a
chronic population health concern.
COMPETENCY
Explain how scholar
practitioners function as leaders in the field of health care.
NON_PERFORMANCE: Does
not explain the importance of using literature and research in the field to
support population health initiatives.
BASIC: Explains the importance of using literature and
research in the field to support population health initiatives.
PROFICIENT: Explains how literature and research in the field
can be used to develop best practices for addressing a chronic population
health concern.
DISTINGUISHED: Explains how literature and research in the field
can be used to develop best practices for addressing a chronic population
health concern. Provides a cogent argument for how scholar-practitioners can
leverage extant knowledge to drive evidence-based improvements in population
health.
COMMENTS:
The assessment requires the
location of two peer-reviewed studies for the coalition to use to develop
evidence-based interventions for the population health topic you selected. How
would you then apply the literature from the two selected studies to address
best practices for the coalition to use in its work? This would be consistent
with the Proficient level in the Scoring Guide.
CRITERIA
6
Organize content so ideas flow
logically with smooth transitions.COMPETENCY
Produce written work that
demonstrates critical thinking and application of knowledge, in accordance with
Capella Writing Standards.
NON_PERFORMANCEDoes
not organize content so ideas flow logically with smooth transitions.
BASIC: Organizes content with some logical flow and smooth
transitions.
PROFICIENT: Organizes content so ideas flow logically with
smooth transitions.
DISTINGUISHE: Organizes content so clarity is enhanced and all
ideas flow logically with smooth transitions.
COMMENTS:
Good work in this area. Proper
writing mechanics, grammar, and organization are important in writing,
especially at the doctoral level. You have some really good information which
is well supported by the literature but the content did not fully align with
the Scoring Guide criterion or assessment overview. One thing that might be
helpful is to review the example paper in the course room and organize your
paper with the identified headings (these align with the Scoring Guide). The
focus of this assessment is the formation of the coalition and its work but not
on specific interventions. Addressing the assessment in better alignment with
the Scoring Guide would be consistent with the Proficient level of competence.
CRITERIA
7
Apply APA style and formatting
to scholarly writing.
COMPETENCY
Produce written work that
demonstrates critical thinking and application of knowledge, in accordance with
Capella Writing Standards.
NON_PERFORMANCE: Does not apply APA style and formatting to
scholarly writing.
BASIC: Applies APA style and formatting to scholarly
writing incorrectly and/or inconsistently, detracting noticeably from good
scholarship.
PROFICIENT: Applies
APA style and formatting to scholarly writing.
DISTINGUISHED: Applies APA style and formatting to scholarly
writing. Exhibits virtually error-free adherence to stylistic conventions,
document structure, and source attributions.
COMMENTS:
Good work in this
area. Proper writing mechanics, grammar, and organization are important in
writing, especially at the doctoral level. You did well in these areas but I
would like to see you work on the consistent application of APA formatting for
all references (sentence case and italicizing journal titles). Please see the
additional feedback and writing resources in the Writing Feedback Tool in the
supplemental grading information. The Writing Center has some great resources
that may assist you in developing this area further. Correcting these areas
would be consistent with the distinguished competency,