Attached is a file (current essay) and here is the feedback from checking in with the professor :
“This is good, and makes some really good points. I would suggest adding a few sentences that represent your own analysis. Why do you think these developments are important? What do they say about U.S. history or the U.S. of today? Are they still relevant? Your writing is extremely factual, which is great, but the best history writing builds on facts to make larger points, and I would encourage you to develop your own voice a bit more.”
The second file are the professor’s instructions along with resources to base the essay on.
Please edit or rewrite this essay thoroughly to include the feedback points, make it more comprehensive and linked to the class material/resources.