Here are my comments for revisions:
· Abstract: include sample size (n=…)
Please limit abstract to 250 word max. (1-2 sentences background, 1 sentence research question, 1 sentence methodology, 2-3 sentences results, 1-2 sentences implications of findings for research and practice
· Intro: Hypotheses, Limitations, method etc: I am aware that you are following the WVPU structure guidelines and it seems as if you have put your proposal into the thesis and then added a brief literature part and methodology.
– I would shift many details from the intro to the literature part, there should not be a comprehensive literature review in the introduction (just a definition of the core terms, gaps, objectives and questions and contribution). E.g. you first describe the term planned obsolescence briefly in the intro as it is a core term, but the detailed description of planned obsolescence should be moved to the theory part (currently on page 16, section 2.5)
– I would not present the hypothesis after the RQ, but derive it in the theory part (last section), after you have made clear why you come up with this hypothesis.
– I suggest shifting future directions and limitations etc. in the discussion part of the thesis
· Results:
– Visualization to answer “have you ever heard of the term “obsolescence before”: I think the pie chart is not needed/meaningful; it is better to describe findings in the text on a more general level, how many % of respondents are familiar with the term, know +/- what it means, or have never had heard if it.
– In the results section, after presenting the overall findings of your study and the RQ, please make a separate subsection for hypothesis testing. Repeat your hypothesis, explain how you have answered it (which test did you di) and then state whether the hypothesis is thus confirmed or rejected. You also need to discus the hypothesis in the discussion.
· Discussion: A student sample is ok for a bachelor thesis, but of course the generalizability is limited. Discuss why.